Comments on: OBJECTIVE: Complete

By: WindSinger37

WindSinger37 — Tue, 07 Feb 2012 08:24:00 +0000

chemiclord, i love how you’ve answered all questions but one which you’ve replied to in total ambiguity, so please answer this question:

IS THE WITCH DEAD?

By: GrimGhost

GrimGhost — Tue, 07 Feb 2012 07:41:40 +0000

Stopping us from seeing Peonie’s X-rated parts.

By: MNH

MNH — Tue, 07 Feb 2012 01:59:24 +0000

What is the Unicorn doing with it’s mane on Peonie’s mowed lawn?

By: swk3000

swk3000 — Mon, 06 Feb 2012 19:41:22 +0000

@chemiclord: I understand your decision to omit the sound effects; however, in this particular case, I have to agree with GrimGhost: there are times where adding a sound effect can actually make it easier to understand what is actually going on. This case is a perfect example. That’s not to say you can’t do this sort of thing without sound effects; it just means that you’ll need to take that extra step to make it clear what’s going on at times. As charles says, a panel with a shot of her head at an unnatural angle (and her neck not hidden by her hair) would tell us exactly what is happening without cluttering up the frame with sound effects.

Of course, if you were going for ambiguity, you’ve done a great job, as all the comments will show. As things stand, you have the option of bringing the witch back later with a diabolical revenge scheme against Tiffany for nearly choking the life out of her, for example.

By: tirus

tirus — Mon, 06 Feb 2012 03:36:05 +0000

Probably needs her to make more golems or something. but really couldn’t any work for that? oh wait, it wouldn’t work for fanservice.

By: GrimGhost

GrimGhost — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 23:43:37 +0000

That, or Peonie once boinked The Love Of Witchie’s Life.

By: GrimGhost

GrimGhost — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 23:42:12 +0000

My theory: Some witch/princess non-consensual action.

By: Rock

Rock — Sun, 05 Feb 2012 18:48:28 +0000

My one regret: we may never find out what it was that the witch actually wanted with Peonie.

By: CrypticMirror

CrypticMirror — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 14:07:57 +0000

@Arkron, (She-)Hulk healing factor.

By: Arkron

Arkron — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 03:37:36 +0000

Very sexy close shot of Tiffany’s face at the bottom right of the page, but… there is just one thing: all over the last page, and in the bigger frame on this page, shows that Tiffany has a cut below her left eye. On the close-up shot, the cut is gone. What happened there?

By: GrimGhost

GrimGhost — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 19:05:06 +0000

@M, I have a great life. But if the writer isn’t going to tell the story so we can get what’s going on, then just take down the page and replace it with more ads. Meanwhile, writing at DC and Marvel is hardly something to hold up as an example for how to write this comic.

By: M

Fri, 03 Feb 2012 18:54:16 +0000

@GrimGhost, get a life, it’s a story, read it like it’s told, or sling yer hook.

Yes we don’t know, for certain, that the witch is dead, but it’s like CrypticMirror says, that’s what happens in stories.

What we do know is that she’s fucked, royally, by a reemergent Tiff, who’s thrown off her own preconceptions about women to become a true badass, and a cuteass.

By: CrypticMirror

CrypticMirror — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 17:02:28 +0000

Hmmm, round nose smileys don’t work.

By: CrypticMirror

CrypticMirror — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 17:01:55 +0000

Y’know, if we still don’t know whether the witch is dead or not (or a Skrull in disguise, still not ruling that out people) then it just means Exiern is the equal of Marvel and DC (although with DC it wouldn’t be a Skrull, but a Cadmus-Clone, which I guess we also can’t rule out now) in comics troping.

Uncertain certain-death is what comics are all about. My criticism in this, we haven’t had a Wolverine (replace with Batman, or Johnny Alpha depending on your comic of choice) crossover yet. An insane crossover with a popular character from another strip is a requirement of making the big time. This must happen soon )

By: Ice Raven

Ice Raven — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 16:48:23 +0000

I know its not pretty but if the witch is dead the large panel should show her face as stairing lifelessly and the tung protruding slackly out of the corner of her mouth.

By: chemiclord

chemiclord — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 15:18:39 +0000

I will take your words into advisement in the future. Thank you.

By: charles

charles — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 11:43:49 +0000

I like the policy of no soundFX for action happening in front of us… But in this case – IF THE WITCH IS DEAD – then the images have fallen short in conveying that. We probably needed a view, in this page, showing her head at an unbelievably wrong angle to the rest of her body, or with open, lifeless eyes… If she’s alive then we likely needed another panel of her choking to believe it.

But back to the story

Anyone notice her face is healed up in the last panel? I’ve actually noticed this happen a few times and suspect its another result of the white magic spell’s ability to change her body. Possibly this “living spell” trying to protect it’s self (i.e. protect it’s host).

By: GrimGhost

GrimGhost — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 08:20:37 +0000

Chemiclord, I haven’t criticized you up till now, but I’m going to start. Your no-sound-effects policy is confusing us readers. If there had been a “CRACK!” when Tiff had the witch’s head in both hands, we’d all know that Tiff snapped the witch’s neck. But no “CRACK!” means what, exactly? It means either she got her neck snapped (but you omitted the sound effects) or she didn’t get her neck snapped. In this page, there is no “PANT, PANT, PANT” by the witch’s mouth. Does that mean she isn’t breathing, or she is breathing but you’ve omitted the sound effect?

Developing a cool writing style is one thing, but not when it interferes with telling the story. Over three pages we’ve seen Tiff messing with the witch, and we >still< can't say for sure whether the witch is dead or not!

By: Sashikinaroji

Sashikinaroji — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 05:29:12 +0000

@jmuchiello

Well, if Max from Tangled can do it, I suppose so can a unicorn~!

By: WindSinger37

WindSinger37 — Fri, 03 Feb 2012 04:13:57 +0000

@ Grim Ghost
I’ll join in. I’ll even drag in the kid wizard and mira as stand ins for the munchkins